Six Sentence Story – Pitch

Rooftop musings.




Jim had found himself in difficult circumstances before, but tonight’s situation was both physically and emotionally challenging.

Here he was, dangling from the roof of one of the rehabbed Victorians in the rich part of town; his palms digging into the top line,  his feet dangling almost straight down with barely a foothold of support.

His work as, let’s call it, a Procurer or maybe Pilferer of Objects, a modern day Robin Hood, perhaps, had him in and out of the finest homes in the city,  each night.

His stomach was still churning from what he had seen in the attic of this one hundred year old beauty, which, in turn, had made him inattentive to the sounds around him, and forced him out the window and onto this roof, to make an expedient escape.

He had but minutes until dawn revealed his presence.

Jim waited until his rapidly pounding heart calmed,  let his hands open from their tight grip, crouched and slid unto the opposing gable,  and shimmied down the drainpipe and made his getaway across the back fence.


It’s a mystery what Jim saw in that attic.  What do you think it was?


Author: valj2750

Woman who wears many hats - wife, mother, teacher, bookkeeper, writer, caregiver, cook, seamstress, photographer and beach bum.

13 thoughts on “Six Sentence Story – Pitch”

  1. an old photo of the burglar’s wife?
    wait…wait… if it was a photo then it would have to be something that would just not be possible (to him) in a bad way..
    yeah, gotta go with the wife/girlfriend or someone like that’s photo

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  2. Well I was thinking a body or a skeleton. It made me think of the movie, Psycho, although the house in the movie didn’t look anything like the one you show here and of course the plot was way different, but other than that . . .
    Excellent SSS!

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  3. This was such a well written story, Val. I loved the way you described his profession, and you had us on edge with him as he made his hasty escape! I was thinking he found a body in the attic, but if we are talking about a photograph it had to be of someone he knew, or…. it could have been of something very disturbing that had been secretly photographed and hidden away all these years. Maybe there were things going on in that house at an earlier time that no one knew about!!!

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